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Beep! Beep! A sound crushed through my ears. I'm Jasmine, one of the lower citizen. My husband Eric never come out of the mine. Brave always encourage me in my heart. Staying alive was my 1st priority. Difficult life tied me up from being rich. I'm in a pan which hold a 9000 degrees. Neighbor sounds damaged my ears. The sun covered the world. Sandstorm ran through my body. Mosquitos kept making me angry. Minerals flows everywhere. No taxes made the world turn to white cloud and blue skies. Beautiful skies flew to Saudi Arabia each day. Crows flew when it turned dull. Swan flew flurry in the sky when the sky turned blue.
The day turned dark and dull only when a word crashed in my ears "Woman cannot walked outside". " How could I travel to the store without a man?", she whispered to herself. If woman could walk outside, all people would be a millionaire fast and live same as a man. I crowded down and hoped she get to do job outside. It kept dull my brain. Tools motivated made my jealous and wanted me to produce coals. I could not hold bunch of Saudi Riyal on her hands without tools. The coals price just low down and changed it into 1 coal for 1 Saudi Riyal but the old price was 1 coals for 5 Saudi Riyal which could buy a bread. One special days, a special thing happen, a rich man cover his body with gold classes, white 1000 Saudi riyal clothes. Brownie chocolate shoes. Many people nodded but she accept and made 5 Saudi Riyal a day. They also agreed on took her to the store each day. From now on, I had food from the store to live and take that money to make a better shelter to mine inside and buy tools. She worked for hours without resting. She had to work for 16 hours and only 8 hours of resting at the mining house, it smell like stinky socks. She don't get any money because the money to buy food and it was only bread. Ate just a little bit and save it for later. One day ate a bread, you could starv. From now, a new store with red paint and Shop n' Go magically appeared in my sight. It sell a whole giant bread which it is equal to 4 breads I ate a day 4 Saudi Riyal stick on the bread. I buy 1 of those and kept 15 Saudi Riyal. I kept that for extras stuff or for health kit. Now with that shop, she had many opportunities to live. Many people thought that she is not in poverty and why she live in a the neighbourhood. One day, a poor citizen ask how do she turn middle class. She just said, "Never scared to do a risky job". A new wooden modern house magically appeared on my neighborhood . Food replenish her. All stuff, also make donation for people too. which make poverty to less poverty. This will help all the citizen a lot. Most of them were "new rich".
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6. What is your character’s biggest dream? What do they really want in their life? Is to have a husband and be high citizen cause I am starving in lower class, I don't have money to buy pickaxe I'm just lonely and nearly starving and leads to death. I also want a husband because I can walk outside when I'm rich citizen with my husband too go to the rich class store and if there is I can make a giant companies and play fair no sexist. I will make a sandstone company 1 stacks of sandstone for 5 minoleans. 7. What is your character’s greatest need? How can they get it? I think is to be rich citizen so I could buy stuff and never get starved, I would go with a man maybe poor rich or middle! I would be rich, I could mine inside. Ask people and give them money to go to store and buy. I could own a company, hired people and hired for people help me to outside and go other country anytime I wanted! In the company I would treat each gender fair. A sandstone company! 8. What makes your character full of sorrow (deep sadness)? She was a girl so she wasn't allow to go outside, her husband died in the mine which is very easy to get killed. She is a poor citizen so she is starving to death and she don't know what to do, she is just staying inside her house and do nothing except for cracking blocks with her hand, she break all of her pickaxe so that is a shame. 9. When is your character most happy? What causes this happiness? When she still has a husband in the old house, we found lots of diamond and we have 2 floor house, about one stacks of coal! It was a lot. It went so good that time until the stupid laws happen, poor have to leave their house and go to a stupid place and Kijae just died in mining of whole which is real. In coal boy they say that some people stay in there forever! 3. If you could read the mind of your character, what would they be thinking? About their job? About their country? About the government? About the people around them? Write quotes from your character about each of these topics. (Mental Traits)I think that what they gonna do now because her husband die. I think their job is just to work in the house, take care of baby that they breed. I think people about other people will say bad words things about her and make her feel bad about her self. I think she feel unfair because country because their husband die and she is confused. She think that the government is not fair because they don't let the girl get outside and thinker. that they are being sexist.
4. What is your character’s biggest fear? How do you know this? I think it is that she is living alone and she don't have a male to live with, she has no friend, no neighbor and no family members left. I think because she is living alone and never see a male come to her house even. 5. What is your character most proud of? Provide evidence. I think she is proud of nothing because she have no males. No friend and other relationship. Also she have lots of baby to take care you know that girls cannot mine even inside so she cannot find money. Her family members have all left here and go to somewhere else so now she is alone 1. Considering the class of your character and what country they live in, describe how your character looks. What are they wearing? In what condition are their clothes? What color is their skin, hair, eyes? Draw a picture of your character with these traits with an explanation. (**hint, you might want to do some research for this one!) This is my picture, she is a female, she is white. She have black eyes she is a lower class citizen. Here clothes some parts are rip and some are normal. A short hair. 2. What does your character feel about his/her position in the world? Are they happy with life? Do they have lots of opportunities? Are they helpful to others? Do they ask for help when they need it? Describe the way your character generally feels and give examples of why they feel this way. (**hint, use some of the tables we've been making in math class to guide you)
She feel disappointed in where she live. She is feeling sad with her life, she don't have much anything because she is a lower citizen and a government can take anything from her so she don't have much opportunities. This character feel so sad that they don't wanna leave because they have no man so they got arrested then laater when they are back they can only build a house and she is very lonely. In my opinion, a dog is beneficial for Ben because it is fun, helpful, and help me be responsible. So you should buy Ben a dog. Here are some evidences and facts to prove why it are beneficial for me: First of all, a dog would help me be responsible. First, when I lost my items, the dog will help me to find out. I think they have millions of cell in there nose so they sniff to find the item and also teach me next time not to lost it again, also when my mom and dad come up they won't punish me for losing something. Also, it help me to take care of stuff and keep it. For example, it would help me take care of toys and thing that are important to me. Second it is very helpful for our family. In my opinion, it help me and my family from having burglars and robbers robbing my house and I might lost everything. Cause when the burglars or robbers come, the dog will chase and make them get out of your house. How could you protect your house without a dog? Next, the dog could play with me when I'm lonely because at home I have no one to play with. Some people might feel sad and lonely that turn crazy. I always want a friend to play with me. He could also be my friend and play with me when I come home from school. Third, a dog is kind and they are funny and cute too. First of all, with the dog I don't need any alarm clock because the dog will wake me up and play with me until I go to school. I also don't need to waste my money for alarm clock. I only need to buy a dog and he will do more things then alarm clock, also the dog live longer then the alarm clock. Could you compare between dog skills and alarm clock skills. Also, the dog would help me be healthy by exercising me with some fun and healthy game like frisbee. Running with him and play some challenge game. Could you imagine how fun if you play some healthy game with the dog and have f also you will get healthy? Finally, you should buy me a dog rather than getting rob, alarm clock, and getting addicted to game. I hope all of this details make you buy me a dog because they are very good and useful in many ways. They help us a lot. Hello, today I'm reflecting on my debate that I did this round 5 and other people in reader class debate. It was very divided, convincing and we have fun. People are starring at each other and stand up saying, people was being so confident. I'm very inspired to all of that people. -Which debate topic was most interesting to you? Which topic was most controversial? The most interesting debate was should computer replace teacher, we compare and some was them were very convincing also it was interesting because computer have no relationship but smart and teacher have relationship but get detention easily, we have lots of people divided in that debate. Also the controversial was are report card necessary because it was super divided and very convincing, people have strong opinion and it was awesome. I was stuck and then I choose one idea that I won't tell because people can get inspired and people would be in the side I choose. -100% of the class changed their mind at least once during the debates. What does this tell you? This tell me that the warrants or the impact of the debaters are very convincing. Facts too. I even change my mind after the debate. I was also stuck and then choose a side. Almost all of them have change the debate was so convincing. The facts, in other words, as you can see. We use all of them to make it convincing. -Give an example of a time you had your mind changed and explain what changed it. The one that I change my mind was are books better than internet, first time I think books are never better than internet but when I heard them said about it I change my mind because they said it was easy to sleep, information in the internet can be fake. Also they are reliable. All of that warrants are convincing to me so I change it to books are better than internet. -How does it feel to be assigned a side of a debate you don't agree with?
It would feel really hard to explain and usually sit on there sit for my opinion. For me it would be really challenging, people maybe sometimes are not confident on the side they are not choosing. You wouldn't know how to find source because you are good on the side you agree and not good on the side you didn't agree with. Topics: Internet brings more harm than good. Which piece of evidence do you think is more convincing? Why do you think this? I think is the game addictions, in my country Vietnam there are lots of people who are addicted to game. Also it would help people have time with their family, explore the world. There are lots of thing in the Earth so explore it, like travels, hang out with friends. Which persuasive language words or phrases do you feel helped your piece the most? Why? I think when I said that could you imagine when you are addicted, I make them imagine and think so they would agree with me. Also it would persuade them to afraid of being game addicted. It help me to make that paragraph hooking and persuading to other. Who was your audience? What were you trying to persuade them of? I think my audience with me are people who have an opposite idea of me and people who is stuck and don’t know which side. Most I’m writing to are 5th grader. I was trying to persuade how harmful the internet is, be safe on the internet and try not to get cyberbullying by other people. If you could write another persuasive piece, what would you write about and who would you write to? I would write about death penalty and on the side no because they are expensive and harmful to the criminal and also I would write this to the people who have different idea than me and I will persuade them to not do that. Writing Piece:Did you ever think internet is good for us and education? Well it is not!
Obviously, internet is more harmful than good because some of us has experience it in real life. Some of us sometimes could be danger with internet! The Internet is bad because cyberbullying, hackers and spammers. Try to be safe on the Internet. First , many of us online are victim of cyberbullying. Cyber Bullies are people online who made the victims got tease and felt very sad, sometimes the victim just commit suicide.For example, people could leave mean comments and bad videos about you, also post inappropriate picture on Facebook or Twitter, that made you feel sad and wanted to stop. but Sometimes they keep doing that and then you feel sad, helpless and commit suicide. As discovered by the movie that my ICT last year let me watch the video of cyberbullying. According to debate.org, about 4,400 kids and also people we know every year because they we got cyberbullying so bad that they just end our life. It also includes boys and girls and remember that adults also got cyber bullied too. . Second, there were lots of spammers and hackers in the Earth. For instance, there were hackers that took your money in your credit card when you are shopping stuff online and a virus on your device. Hackers could creep us or you out by popping up strange website. Usually hackers are in a room where you don't know. Also, there are spammers who keeps mailing us videos, image and message that is inappropriate, made us feel uncomfortable. Also it made us feel we are around with creepy guys. Spammers were usually kind of people who asked you to bought stupid stuff and advertisement. I had experience how spammer emailing stupid stuff for me one time. Third, some of us could be addict to game so much. For example, some of us use less time with their family or do not explore the world to know more things. How could we use time with our family or explore the world with game addiction? There is no way because when you are addicted you are so loving the game and don't care about other stuff.There's a boy in Korea that play 38h and die in the computer without eating, going to the toilet, or even drinking, just keep playing and playing and die in the table of the computer, this fact is from the news. For instance, there's a game called Flappy Bird where you lose just keep playing and playing non stop and it cause addiction for people. I has experience the game and it was so addicted that it make me play it and non stop playing it. Who else in here are addicted to Flappy Bird. Can you imagine how would you be if you play Flappy Bird non stop? Last, I hope you know that Internet is good but also harmful so go to Internet safely. They can make we feel pain or feeling uncomfortable. Remember to be safe on the Internet because sometime they are useful but also dangerous! Pre-writing
My first one was inFamous I talk about all of the inFamous game. Next I think I played inFamous Second Son already so I chose it, next I zoom in into the character and I chose it.
Yes first time it was very messy when I was doing it on my notebook later I use the graphic orgainizer and it help me to organize it so know it was not messy and it was very beautiful! Drafting
Yes it was a little bit because I know the game but still I'm not an expert at it so I think it is not much good.
I think is harder because I think I'm not a expert at inFamous Second Son and I'm a expert at MineCraft! I play Minecraft more than inFamous Second Son Revising
It add it to be more good and more hooking the audience and it can be good. Also it can make the story not long and it will be more interesting.
I add the most interesting thing so it will be more cool and more interesting also I add only one sentence on lots of them! Editing
I read out loud to know which sentence or word I'm wrong and then I fix it on my notebook. This is Ms.Hannah way teaching to me.
I was most is verb tenses and plurals because I was a beginner at that I was not good at that two thing. Publishing
I choose the image and caption because that one I think it is the most hooking to do so I choose that for my writing.
I was proud that I'm doing it very fast so I'm very proud of myself so I think I did a good job. I would like to share it with my class. |
Literacy
In literacy, I will put stuff that I learn |